Chapter Two - Part Deux
I liked this part of Chapter Two, so I wanted to post it as well.
Set things up: Aya is currently hidden under the cabin floor of a boat she's travelling on in oder to cross the Irare/Wo-Quo border. The stone/eye of Uruwashii refers to the stone eye that Aya finds in the first chapter that belonged to a statue of Uruwashii, the first Seiken. Random Fact: Uruwashii is in actually a chick, but in this novel they constantly refer to Uruwashii as a dude because history changed facts due to the fact that Irare is an oppressive society towards women.
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Current Word Count: 16395
Words Left To Count: 33605
Days Left: 24
Chapter Two
Min Sen - Chuyoi Chokai
The hours passed and the sun came up, but Aya remained in darkness. She lost count of all time but knew that it was near the afternoon and soon they would be at the border and perhaps the most dangerous part of her quest. To escape from Irare by boat was something not many tried because of the border checks, but she knew this was the only way for her.
Every now and then Kaiwa would come down to tell her where along the way they were, and the boards would creak underneath him. It reassured Aya to know that he came down to check on her, but she knew that soon he would come down and tell her that they were at the border and she knew it would drive the fear into her heart.
The creaking of the floorboards came again.
"We're coming up to the border. Stay calm, and stay quiet. It might take awhile for us to get through, just stay calm."
"Ok," Aya said, clutching the eye so hard that the stone cut into her hands.
Kaiwa went away and then after some time she felt the boat come to a stop and she heard voices, she knew they were soldiers talking to Kaiwa. They spoke for some time, but Aya could barely make it out, she was pretty sure that they were asking where he was going and what he was carrying.
After a few minutes they stopped speaking and she waited again with a growing dread until finally after what seemed a lifetime she heard some people boarding. For a brief moment she almost lost her calm, thinking that they knew she was there for sure, but then she heard their voices.
"Sorry, it's just routine," the soldier said.
"That's alright, feel free to look about."
Aya was drenched in cold sweat and tried to keep her breathing low, but her heart was pounding so hard that she was sure the soldiers would be able to hear it. She could hear the soft thuds of their boots on the deck and then the sickening sound of them coming down the stairs until they were walking just above her, causing the planks to creek.
Panic washed over her, she closed her eyes and bit her lip trying to make herself disappear. She knew they'd figure it out, she just knew it! They were asking question and she knew that at any moment Kaiwa would give her away to save himself. She was going to fail! They were going to find her! Her heart beat faster until she thought it might explode. And then...
The creaking went away, and the soldiers and Kaiwa went back up the ladder to the deck. Aya opened an eye, only to find darkness, but also silence. They were leaving, and they hadn't found her. Aya felt herself relaxing, her heart started to slow down and she could breath easy again. They hadn't found her... This was it, the moment had passed and now she could make it to Nan Riku. She was going to make it.
Time passed by as the boat slowly inched past the border and then maybe an hour later she heard the creaking of Kaiwa's feet.
"It's safe," he said. Then she heard a crack and one of the boards was lifted free, light flooded in and she saw Kaiwa's face and smiled.
"We made it!" She wanted to reach up and hug him, but the boards prevented this. "Hurry up and get me out of here!" She urged, still smiling. Kaiwa himself had a grin on his face.
"I was so worried, I thought for sure they'd figure us out."
"You were worried? My heart almost burst through my chest!"
Kaiwa finally got enough boards up and with a hand, helped her out of there. She sat on the floor, letting her feet fall into the hole. Kaiwa looked her over and saw the eye still clutched in her hand.
"What's that?" He asked, pointing.
"Oh!" Aya had forgotten she was still holding it. She held it forward, and noticed for the first time that her hand was bleeding from a sharp edge. "It's an eye from a statue."
"You're bleeding!" He said, he reached for a box and in it found some gauze. "Give me your hand."
"I was clutching it too hard," she explained and he wrapped the gauze around her hand. "I think he's watching over me..."
"He?" Kaiwa looked up inquisitively.
"Oh, the eye belonged to a statue of Uruwashii."
"I know that statue, in Mizu Tokai, I saw it once when I was younger... Sær destroyed it?"
Aya nodded sadly.
"Your lips bleeding too," he reached out and wiped some of the blood off with a cloth.
"Didn't notice," she took the cloth and held it to her lip.
"I didn't think anyone could get so damaged all by themselves in a hole for less than a day.
Aya smiled. "I was so scared."
Kaiwa paused and looked up at her nervous face. "You're very young, and you're taking the whole world on... It's very brave."
She smiled shyly. "Thank you."
"Here, give me the eye," Kaiwa held out his hand and Aya gently handed it to him. "This should be somewhere important."
That evening, as the sun began to set in the city of Chuyoi Chokai and the markets began to close and the nightlife came to life, one final boat came down the river from Irare, two people on its deck, and on its mast, gleaming in the dying light of the harbour, was a white stone cut into a mast. The stone of Uruwashii, watching the road ahead.
(There ya go, that's me trying to be suspenceful. Is it working? I'm entirely sure how good my 'suspence skills' are, but I try, really I try. *Cries* WHY MUST YOU JUDGE!?!)
Set things up: Aya is currently hidden under the cabin floor of a boat she's travelling on in oder to cross the Irare/Wo-Quo border. The stone/eye of Uruwashii refers to the stone eye that Aya finds in the first chapter that belonged to a statue of Uruwashii, the first Seiken. Random Fact: Uruwashii is in actually a chick, but in this novel they constantly refer to Uruwashii as a dude because history changed facts due to the fact that Irare is an oppressive society towards women.
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Current Word Count: 16395
Words Left To Count: 33605
Days Left: 24
Chapter Two
Min Sen - Chuyoi Chokai
The hours passed and the sun came up, but Aya remained in darkness. She lost count of all time but knew that it was near the afternoon and soon they would be at the border and perhaps the most dangerous part of her quest. To escape from Irare by boat was something not many tried because of the border checks, but she knew this was the only way for her.
Every now and then Kaiwa would come down to tell her where along the way they were, and the boards would creak underneath him. It reassured Aya to know that he came down to check on her, but she knew that soon he would come down and tell her that they were at the border and she knew it would drive the fear into her heart.
The creaking of the floorboards came again.
"We're coming up to the border. Stay calm, and stay quiet. It might take awhile for us to get through, just stay calm."
"Ok," Aya said, clutching the eye so hard that the stone cut into her hands.
Kaiwa went away and then after some time she felt the boat come to a stop and she heard voices, she knew they were soldiers talking to Kaiwa. They spoke for some time, but Aya could barely make it out, she was pretty sure that they were asking where he was going and what he was carrying.
After a few minutes they stopped speaking and she waited again with a growing dread until finally after what seemed a lifetime she heard some people boarding. For a brief moment she almost lost her calm, thinking that they knew she was there for sure, but then she heard their voices.
"Sorry, it's just routine," the soldier said.
"That's alright, feel free to look about."
Aya was drenched in cold sweat and tried to keep her breathing low, but her heart was pounding so hard that she was sure the soldiers would be able to hear it. She could hear the soft thuds of their boots on the deck and then the sickening sound of them coming down the stairs until they were walking just above her, causing the planks to creek.
Panic washed over her, she closed her eyes and bit her lip trying to make herself disappear. She knew they'd figure it out, she just knew it! They were asking question and she knew that at any moment Kaiwa would give her away to save himself. She was going to fail! They were going to find her! Her heart beat faster until she thought it might explode. And then...
The creaking went away, and the soldiers and Kaiwa went back up the ladder to the deck. Aya opened an eye, only to find darkness, but also silence. They were leaving, and they hadn't found her. Aya felt herself relaxing, her heart started to slow down and she could breath easy again. They hadn't found her... This was it, the moment had passed and now she could make it to Nan Riku. She was going to make it.
Time passed by as the boat slowly inched past the border and then maybe an hour later she heard the creaking of Kaiwa's feet.
"It's safe," he said. Then she heard a crack and one of the boards was lifted free, light flooded in and she saw Kaiwa's face and smiled.
"We made it!" She wanted to reach up and hug him, but the boards prevented this. "Hurry up and get me out of here!" She urged, still smiling. Kaiwa himself had a grin on his face.
"I was so worried, I thought for sure they'd figure us out."
"You were worried? My heart almost burst through my chest!"
Kaiwa finally got enough boards up and with a hand, helped her out of there. She sat on the floor, letting her feet fall into the hole. Kaiwa looked her over and saw the eye still clutched in her hand.
"What's that?" He asked, pointing.
"Oh!" Aya had forgotten she was still holding it. She held it forward, and noticed for the first time that her hand was bleeding from a sharp edge. "It's an eye from a statue."
"You're bleeding!" He said, he reached for a box and in it found some gauze. "Give me your hand."
"I was clutching it too hard," she explained and he wrapped the gauze around her hand. "I think he's watching over me..."
"He?" Kaiwa looked up inquisitively.
"Oh, the eye belonged to a statue of Uruwashii."
"I know that statue, in Mizu Tokai, I saw it once when I was younger... Sær destroyed it?"
Aya nodded sadly.
"Your lips bleeding too," he reached out and wiped some of the blood off with a cloth.
"Didn't notice," she took the cloth and held it to her lip.
"I didn't think anyone could get so damaged all by themselves in a hole for less than a day.
Aya smiled. "I was so scared."
Kaiwa paused and looked up at her nervous face. "You're very young, and you're taking the whole world on... It's very brave."
She smiled shyly. "Thank you."
"Here, give me the eye," Kaiwa held out his hand and Aya gently handed it to him. "This should be somewhere important."
That evening, as the sun began to set in the city of Chuyoi Chokai and the markets began to close and the nightlife came to life, one final boat came down the river from Irare, two people on its deck, and on its mast, gleaming in the dying light of the harbour, was a white stone cut into a mast. The stone of Uruwashii, watching the road ahead.
(There ya go, that's me trying to be suspenceful. Is it working? I'm entirely sure how good my 'suspence skills' are, but I try, really I try. *Cries* WHY MUST YOU JUDGE!?!)
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